Christina,
mid-twenties, sits alone on a leather sofa. She seems rigidly tense, but is
absorbed in a game on her smart phone. A door clicks open, startling her, and
she rises nervously as Tobias enters.
CHRISTINA
Listen, I’ve
been thinking, and I really don’t think I need to do this.
TOBIAS
(interrupting)
You need to do
this, Chris. There are options and then there are requirements. This is a
requirement.
CHRISTINA
(walking to
the window, fiddling with the phone, agitated)
I don’t get
all these stupid rules. Aren’t there enough already, out there? Why here, too?
TOBIAS
(leaning
calmly against the wall)
It’s everywhere,
you know. There is always something. Life would just fall apart if they took it
away. You don’t have to believe in it, you don’t even have to like it, but...
well, time’s up. Do you have your portfolio?
CHRISTINA
(retrieving a
small black folder from the couch)
I pieced it
together last night. At first I thought hand-written was best, but then I
started typing, but then I typed too much. So I started cutting things. It’s
not much. It’s not enough!
TOBIAS
(putting a
comforting hand on her shoulder)
You have done
plenty, my friend. Your record will speak for itself. Now, it truly is time.
CHRISTINA
(looking
towards the other door with trepidation)
How do we do
this? I mean, will you come with me?
TOBIAS
Of course.
2 INT. WIDE SHOT – A LONG HALLWAY
The hallway is
richly carpeted and wallpapered, lit by ornate sconces. A dozen uniformly sized
and framed portraits line the wall. They all seem to be glaring sternly.
Christina enters first, clutching the portfolio against her chest with both
arms. Tobias walks a step behind her, keeping pace. When she pauses halfway
down the hall to look back, he pauses as well but does not react. They continue
until they reach the door at the far end.
CHRISTINA
I wish the
walk were longer.
TOBIAS
(sympathetically)
No, you really
do not. Already the sun is setting out there. Birds are flying south for the
winter. And your phone is obsolete.
CHRISTINA
(after a
brief, nervous laugh at the phone comment, she hands the device to him for
safekeeping)
Help me,
Tobias. I’m nobody yet. He will SEE that.
TOBIAS
(waving away
her fear)
Like we
practiced before, look him in the eye, arms straight at your side, and tell him
who you are.
CHRISTINA
(following Tobias’s
suggestion, she gathers herself up, and opens the door)
3 INT. WIDE SHOT – A WALL WITH A DOOR
We see Christina
enter from the perspective of someone sitting at a desk. The room is brightly
lit and featureless. The door softly shuts behind her, as if on a pneumatic
hinge, as she approaches the camera.
CHRISTINA
(wide-eyed but
stoic)
Hello, my name
is Christina Blanchard. I was born in Union City...
Oh I like this quite a bit. I love the way you worked your overheard phrase into the narrative. I could visualize the shots as I read the words. The end scene is strong but the closing line doesn't seem to complete the storyline. If I'm reading the story correctly perhaps she could begin with the end of her story. My name is Christina. I died in an accident. This takes an ambiguous ending and makes it concrete.
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